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Postby Shakespeare's Sister » Thu Mar 16, 2006 4:40 am

Well i've never done this before, share my thoughts, so here i go....

I SEE

I know the movement
I know a moment
Which passes me by
As i turn around
I see the movement
I see a moment
Which catches up with me

I like the sound
I like the hum
Which i cannot hear
As i move closer
I love the sound
And i love the hum
Which i can now hear

EVERYBODY'S GONNA BE HAPPY

Everybody's coming to get me
And everybody's gonna be happy

Why can't you understand me?
Or even believe in me?
I need to be free
Just to be me

Because i want you to know
That everyone's gonna be happy
With or without me

Take care
I'll see you soon
Maybe not right now
Maybe down the line
Maybe not today
Maybe not tomorrow
But some day...

HEADLINES

It's on the news
On the TV and radio
She's a fat girl
Alert, Alert
We need help here
Alert, Alert

How can this be?
She's a lovely, attractive girl
.....but she's fat
A nice personality too
But she's fat

She's a headline
Not for who she is
But for what she looks like


I'll post more soon....
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Postby Cracked Pleasures » Fri Jun 02, 2006 12:17 pm

And you told me that I had talent?! These writings are amazing, couldn't have done anything like that second one myself. Magnificent work!
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Postby tca2005 » Fri Jun 02, 2006 6:56 pm

Shakespeare's Sister wrote:Well i've never done this before, share my thoughts, so here i go....

I SEE

I know the movement
I know a moment
Which passes me by
As i turn around
I see the movement
I see a moment
Which catches up with me

I like the sound
I like the hum
Which i cannot hear
As i move closer
I love the sound
And i love the hum
Which i can now hear


It's good to be inspired by someone but this seemed a bit too similar a Morrissey song. Not wishing to knock your confidence, when I read that I immediately thought of this:

live a life
I feel the pain
To sing this song
To tell the tale
I wish I never even heard the song
I see the world
It makes me puke
But then I look at you and know
That somewhere there’s a someone who can soothe me

Shakespeare's Sister wrote:EVERYBODY'S GONNA BE HAPPY

Everybody's coming to get me
And everybody's gonna be happy

Why can't you understand me?
Or even believe in me?
I need to be free
Just to be me

Because i want you to know
That everyone's gonna be happy
With or without me

Take care
I'll see you soon
Maybe not right now
Maybe down the line
Maybe not today
Maybe not tomorrow
But some day...

HEADLINES

It's on the news
On the TV and radio
She's a fat girl
Alert, Alert
We need help here
Alert, Alert

How can this be?
She's a lovely, attractive girl
.....but she's fat
A nice personality too
But she's fat

She's a headline
Not for who she is
But for what she looks like


I'll post more soon....


These two are very good though, the last is pretty bloody funny.

I wasn't trying to put you down with the criticism or anything I think you have talent, which is a rare thing, but I find constructive is good for you in the long run, and if it helps you be the best you can be then it's worth it.
Make no mistake my friend, your pointless life will end.
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